Tuesday, October 18, 2011

Writing To Comprehension

PFT's summary

"The receivers still in Denver are just fine with Broncos QB Tim Tebow." (PFT's emphasis)

What do you, reader, take that to mean? That the remaining receivers in Denver are happy with Tebow starting? Because that's how it reads, no?

The article linked says nothing of the sort--it says that despite Brandon Lloyd's departure, Tim Tebow likes "the guys they got."

Mind you, I don't think this meant to be dishonest. I just think the PFT guys can't write a simple declarative sentence for shit. Which could have been done thusly, "Despite Lloyd's departure, Tebow just fine with Denver receivers" or, "Tebow likes remaining WR Corps". Really, there's a dozen ways of phrasing it that would be better than the chosen route.

But it will take more than that butchered job to top their all-time best worst sentence:  "The folks in Minnesota are trying to build a new stadium for the Vikings before the Vikings join in California the NBA team that once played in the Twin Cities."

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